Saturday, 29 May 2010

Gone

Ooh Mr Jenny has been kind this week! For this week’s Saturday Centus I have swapped the prompt to the end and continued with my week one contribution.

“Hey, looks like you could do with a hot meal – how have you been?” It must be five years since the last time we met.

“I’ve been fine” I lied, too ashamed to confess to how I’d been living my life. “How about you? Still working all hours?” As he pulled me to my feet I noticed that he was starting to age, fine lines across his brow, smile lines around his eyes.

We walked across the park to a cafe, “I need the bathroom” he said, “I’ll be right back”

Ten minutes passed.

“May I help you, miss? You look puzzled.”
“Mmmm… thank you, I’m just looking for my father. We came in together a moment ago, but he seems to have wandered off.”

17 comments:

  1. This was a very nice job, ES! You left me curious...always a good thing to do with a reader.

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  2. Curious indeed; this was a great take on this. I'm left wondering about their relationship!

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  3. These little stories always raise more questions, I want more please!

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  4. Like PJ, I want to find out the rest of the story!

    =)

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  5. I think the saying "always leave them wanting more" is good for these Saturday Centus. Like everyone else, I'm curious what else there is to tell. Really good job.

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  6. He pulled you to your feet? Interesting. Are you injured, I mean other than your obviously broken heart?

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  7. I want the next installment already...very nice...Peace

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  8. Father's that disappear...
    Nice way to take it this week (o:

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  9. Wow, great take! You are all going such creative directions with this! I need to know what happens next, though, darn it!

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  10. all around the centus web ppl want more...I think we might have to oblige some day. This was fantastic, by the way!

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  11. Very good! Yeah...where'd he go??

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  12. The old disappearing dad trick, eh? LOL! Excellent story! You've piqued my curiousity for more!

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  13. Yep, I absolutely want more. Great job with the prompt. Hope this continues...

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  14. Great job, really liked the way you used the prompt

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  15. More please! Mine deals with a disappearing dad of an entirely different sort. It's amazing the way everyone goes off in so many directions. This was really nicely done! Kathy

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  16. I like this. Left me guessing what's next.

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  17. Hello, I'm late for my post but I suspect he will show up some day lol .

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