Sunday, 8 August 2010

Waiting

Saturday Centus time again. 100 words or less not including the prompt (as usual in bold) – just as well I’m not writing a novel, it would take for ever!!

I shouldn’t have made this journey. Rules say don’t get involved with the clients but Dotty is, well, different. She has a certain something about her, a fragility that belies an inner strength. I’ve let her go to talk to her father on her own. I understand why she had to come today but couldn’t let her come alone. I’ve parked up a few houses away from where she now stands waiting for the door to open. I’m deliberately parked facing away but can see her even through the writing on the door mirror objects in the rear view mirror are closer than they appear. She’s OK, I’m here for her.

17 comments:

  1. Really makes you wonder that is behind the door for Dotty!

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  2. I'm glad she's got someone backing her up!

    Well done...

    =)

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  3. Nice Heather! I love the way you are writing this from the counselor's perspective. Really well done. Kat

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  4. Very clever indeed ;-) Some mystery, some practicality...100 words well spent! Peace

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  5. This was just perfect for this prompt. Very well thought out. I loved it. Great Centus.

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  6. I sense a mother protecting her young. But that can't be right. She a client. You have my attention!

    Thanks..........cj

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  7. Intriguing! There is definitely a story within that story! I enjoyed your contribution this week!

    Malisa

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  8. This definitely makes me want to know more! What kind of client is she? What is going on here?

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  9. How very intriguing. Therapist? Lawyer? Private Investigator? And what's behind the door? Spurned lover? Abuser? Birth parents? Ooooh...you must finish this story!

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  10. Makes me want to know just what Dotty's father has done to her that this person felt the need to come along and keep a watchful eye through the mirror.

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  11. Very well written piece! A clever and unique take on the prompt for sure! Great job.

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  12. I can really hear the characters voice and fear in this. Good job!

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  13. I can really hear the character's voice and fear in this. Good job!

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  14. I can see that car and that face in the mirror..great imagery.

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  15. I loved what you did with this. So much going on; so sparingly shared.

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  16. sure gets you thinking!

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  17. Wow. I love how this short story can be the spin off for so many possibilities.

    Really excellent use of the prompt. When you walk away from a story with more questions then answers I think that speaks really highly for the work.

    Although it is annoyed.

    Darn it.

    Thanks for linking.

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