Saturday 10 July 2010

The beginning

Slightly different spin this week to celebrate Saturday Centus number 10 – we’re allowed 200 words, whoo, hoo!! But it has to be on a romantic theme.

I know I haven’t been around for a couple of weeks and I haven’t looked back at the prompts I missed – deliberately so as not to kick myself if I missed an opportunity!

Anyhow, onwards. I hope this completes a little more of ‘my’ story. Remember – the ‘I’ is not me – it’s totally fictitious! The prompt is in bold as usual.

The other entries are here

The party was in full swing by the time I entered the room, I darted in between the guests as discreetly as I could, trying not to draw too much attention to myself. There was a wonderful cacophony of noise surrounding me but I managed to hear a very distinct ‘Ahem’. When I turned around I was startled to meet a green-eyed gaze which completed a perfect face. My heart raced and my breath became short, I could feel my face warming, knowing the resultant colour would give away my feelings. ‘Would you care for some air, you seem rather, umm warm’ The voice was velvet perfection.

He took my elbow and gently led me outside to the cool late summer breeze, I knew I shouldn’t even be there. Certainly shouldn’t be alone with him and his reputation, I wondered why he had picked me out. Was it because he knew I shouldn’t be there? Was I a challenge? Another conquest to make? Before I knew what was happening I was in his arms, powerless to resist the pull of his lips to mine. I knew it was wrong. But it felt right. I didn’t tell him about you until you were two years old. We were fine, you and I. We didn’t need him.

16 comments:

  1. Wow! A great twist to the prompt. Full of passion but such an ending!!

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  2. ES, I can't believe you actually wrote a real honest-to-god romance style story. Nice and delicately done.

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  3. You surprised me! I was all into the "The voice was velvet perfection" and you threw a little kid into the mix.

    Really clever. Loved your writing here.

    What a fun week of interesting and funny stories.

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  4. Is there something you haven't told me?

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  5. Really nicely done Heather! Beautiful twist at the end. You could definitely turn this into a great short story. Romance, yes, but not cheesy:) Kat

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  6. Well done. Funny, I put a kid in mine, too. Great minds...

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  7. A nice job with the prompt.

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  8. I'm really enjoying the prompt this week, yours included.

    Nice job!

    =)

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  9. OooOOo... great twist at the end! Who needs that velvety guy, anyway? :)

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  10. Nice spin! I liked the velvet voice!

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  11. Ooooh. A smooth talker. And you used one of my most very favorite words: cacophony! Love it!

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  12. Oh, the tales we weave....

    Good one!

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  13. Oh, this was very good. Can't wait until next week. Great job.

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  14. Beautiful job on this! I was very impressed with your writing. Very vivid imagery and you nailed the genre perfectly. Well done.

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  15. Like so many others, I like you writing. It's smooth and slides us seamlessly through the story. And what a story! Who would have guessed. Thanks for this one.

    ..........cj Schlottman

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  16. You made my heart go pitter pat!

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