Saturday, 19 June 2010

The first time

I’m liking this Saturday Centus stuff! Shame I’ll miss the next few weeks :( I’ve tried to link in with my previous efforts and am actually enjoying finding out who ‘I’ am – does that make sense? I mean I obviously know myself but I’m still getting to know the ‘I’ in my story for it is not the real me! There are back links here, if you want to see what happened previously – I’m feeling a bit like a time traveller now!

Anyway – onwards, cut the waffle, this week’s prompt is in italics – don’t forget to pop over to read the others.

It was Fathers Day, 1984, when I heard that voice in the hallway, my mother pulled me closer to her. I was four years old and the apple of her eye. It had always been the two of us and that was the way we liked it. We’d bake, sew, read and draw, spending all our time together when we could. On the night’s she worked, I went to a neighbour who cared for me as one of her own.

The voice moved closer, her grip tightened around me. “Honey” she said, “ Meet your Daddy”  I looked up into his bright blue eyes and smiled at him for the very first time.

16 comments:

  1. Wow, that's a good one..hope it's not from experience. Great writing this week

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  2. How delightful! Or is it bittersweet?

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  3. That is similar to what happened to me except I was 9 Great use

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  4. I just love that you've made up a new I for these. The first person narrative is great.

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  5. Part of what makes this good is that the reader can fill in all the details in their imagination.
    Nice job!

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  6. So how did it turn out? That's what I want to know! (Which means you did a good job.)

    =)

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  7. Really nicely done Heather. I love the way you've threaded all of these together. Hope you have a great trip! Kathy

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  8. Wow, I can't wait until you get back and see what happens next. Great job this week.

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  9. your little stories always suck me right in.....good job!

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  10. I think its so wonderful that you are doing this and finding more of you ... this is wonderful!

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  11. Well done. You and I went similar ways this week!

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  12. Whoa! That's pretty sharp...nice take on our prompt...Peace and blessings

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  13. Love how you did this, I hope it has a happy ending.

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  14. Very nicely done! What a creative take on the prompt this week!

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  15. This is fantastic. It is so neat to see how everyone twists the exact same words into a different shape.

    You really painted a picture here.

    And I thank you for linking and sharing your thoughts.

    It is amazing what comes out of our heads sometimes, isn't it?

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